Sheebo's Songs

[Pokepal17]

Well, I thought I'd share some songs that I write. :3
This one's called Alone.
It doesn't really rhyme or have a rhythm because the message is more serious than the tune. :3

I'm just standing here,
Waiting for you.
You held my hand,
But now you've run way.

The sun may shine,
In the bright, blue sky
But from my eyes,
All it does it rain.

And I ride life,
As it takes me down.
Further to a place,
Where all I have is pain.

I can't take it anymore.
I just can't take it anymore.
Alone again,
Without a friend,
To help me smile again.

Alone again,
Inside my head,
Where everything is dead.

The greys of the storms,
Give pleasure to my mind.
Impulses of death,
Surround me everyday.

The scars sleep quietly,
A job they couldn't do.
The burns stand naked,
Unable to ease the grief.

The music hurts because,
It just doesn't understand.
The drugs that donate highs,
Fail to send me relief.

I can't take it anymore.
I just can't take it anymore.
Alone again,
Without a friend,
To help me smile again.

Alone again,
Inside my head,
Where everything is dead.

Cracked, red, bloody eyes.
Arms that wear my scars.
Time passes every day,
and so does my hope.

Sometimes I hear a voice,
Telling me to end it all.
The only friend I have,
Only wants my downfall.

I'm afraid to really go,
Because I just don't know,
If be like this for all my life,
Or if I'll smile again.

I can't take it anymore.
I just can't take it anymore.
Alone again,
Without a friend,
To help me smile again.

Alone again,
Inside my head,
Where everything is dead.

 

[TJgamer]

I see what you mean by the message being more serious than the actual melody or structure. And you're definitely right!
The idea of having no friend to raise your spirits can be horrible. And as we all know, suicide comes to mind. But we must resist that temptation. For in life, there's always hope.
Have you completely finished the song? I'd like to give it a hear.
Great work!

 

[Pokepal17]

I see what you mean by the message being more serious than the actual melody or structure. And you're definitely right!
The idea of having no friend to raise your spirits can be horrible. And as we all know, suicide comes to mind. But we must resist that temptation. For in life, there's always hope.
Have you completely finished the song? I'd like to give it a hear.
Great work!

Thanks. :3
Well, I'll probably revise the song, and make it better once I learn to play guitar. The basic idea and set of lyrics came to me out of nowhere, and I quickly built the song off them. :3